...ADVOCACY ESSAY: PEER REVIEW MEMO When you are ready to review a peer’s essay, open this document in one window and the essay in another window (you’ll be cutting and pasting information from the essay into this memo. Place your cursor in the gray field to record your answer. Refer to specific parts of paper by paragraph number. Reviewer’s Name: Karen Adame Title of Essay Reviewed: Intervention Programs for Youth to Reduce Deliquency Author’s Name: Jessica Leal-Rosas Date: 6/4/13 GENERAL COMMENTS Begin by reading your peer’s essay all the way through. Mark areas that are difficult to read, or don’t make sense, or that you think have some grammatical/usage problems. When you have read through the entire essay, come back and choose up to five sentences/areas that you marked for readability. Copy the text and insert it here, along with the paragraph number. You do not have to identify the error or fix it… just locate problems. No more than five sentences: For the past decades, researchers such as Peter Greenwood have focused their attention… Indeed, any program that is introduced to help reduce… After having read the whole paper through the first time, write out a few “big picture” comments. What one element of the paper do you think needs the most work before your peer turns it in as a final draft? There are several grammar errors and to explain what are concepts such as zero tolerance and get tough on crime. If you had to grade it right now based...
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...Role of Women: Thematic Essay Throughout the years the role of women has changed significantly. In the past women got looked down on and had no importance in life, now in women have more of a say about what goes on into today society. Women have more room to grow now then the did back then. Throughout the years the voice in women have changed, by looking at the authors of: Hardy, Defoe, and Brittain. Many people can see the changes the women have changed in the world. Daniel Defoe started writing in the year 1683 with the interest in politics, targeting support for King Williams III. Throughout his life Defoe became more adventurous in his writing and wrote an essay called, The Education of Women in the essay he states, “their youth is spent to teach them to sew or make baubles. They are taught to read, indeed, and perhaps to write their names or so, and that is the height of a women’s education.” (372-text-Defoe). Towards the end of the 1600s women could not do...
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...Global Innovations: #1 Essay basis for Test Though created in the United States by African Americans, hip hop culture and music is now global in scope. Youth culture and opinion is meted out in both Israeli hip hop and Palestinian hip hop, while Canada, France, Germany, the U.K., Poland, Brazil, Japan, Africa, Australia and the Caribbean have long-established hip hop followings. According to the U.S. Department of State, hip hop is "now the center of a mega music and fashion industry around the world," that crosses social barriers and cuts across racial lines. National Geographic recognizes hip hop as "the world's favorite youth culture" in which "just about every country on the planet seems to have developed its own local rap scene." Through its international travels, hip hop is now considered a “global musical epidemic,” and has diverged from its ethnic roots by way of globalization and localization. Although some non-American rappers may still relate with young black Americans, hip hop now transcends its original culture, and is appealing because it is “custommade to combat the anomie that preys on adolescents wherever nobody knows their name.” Hip hop is attractive in its ability to give a voice to disenfranchised youth in any country, and as music with a message it is a form available to all societies worldwide. From its early spread to Europe and Japan to an almost worldwide acceptance through Asia and South American countries such as Brazil, the musical...
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...I try to draw an analogy with the process of reading application essays. The bad. Ninety percent of the applications I read contain what I call McEssays - usually five-paragraph essays that consist primarily of abstractions and unsupported generalization. They are technically correct in that they are organized and have the correct sentence structure and spelling, but they are boring. Sort of like a Big Mac. I have nothing against Big Macs, but the one I eat in Charlottesville is not going to be fundamentally different from the one I eat in Paris, Peoria or Palm Springs. I am not going to rave about the quality of a particular Big Mac. The same can be said about the generic essay. If an essay starts out: "I have been a member of the band and it has taught me leadership, perseverance and hard work," I can almost recite the rest of the essay without reading it. Each of the three middle paragraphs gives a bit of support to an abstraction, and the final paragraph restates what has already been said. A McEssay is not wrong, but it is not going to be a positive factor in the admission decision. It will not allow a student to stand out. A student who uses vague abstractions poured into a preset form will end up being interpreted as a vague series of abstractions. A student who uses cliché becomes, in effect, a cliché. If we are what we eat, we are also what we write. Not only does a preset form lead to a generic essay, so does a generic approach to what is perceived as the right topic...
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...I try to draw an analogy with the process of reading application essays. The bad. Ninety percent of the applications I read contain what I call McEssays - usually five-paragraph essays that consist primarily of abstractions and unsupported generalization. They are technically correct in that they are organized and have the correct sentence structure and spelling, but they are boring. Sort of like a Big Mac. I have nothing against Big Macs, but the one I eat in Charlottesville is not going to be fundamentally different from the one I eat in Paris, Peoria or Palm Springs. I am not going to rave about the quality of a particular Big Mac. The same can be said about the generic essay. If an essay starts out: "I have been a member of the band and it has taught me leadership, perseverance and hard work," I can almost recite the rest of the essay without reading it. Each of the three middle paragraphs gives a bit of support to an abstraction, and the final paragraph restates what has already been said. A McEssay is not wrong, but it is not going to be a positive factor in the admission decision. It will not allow a student to stand out. A student who uses vague abstractions poured into a preset form will end up being interpreted as a vague series of abstractions. A student who uses cliché becomes, in effect, a cliché. If we are what we eat, we are also what we write. Not only does a preset form lead to a generic essay, so does a generic approach to what is perceived as the right topic...
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...Janardanan Research Analysis Essay The Influence of Hip Hop on Today’s Youth “After silence, that which comes nearest to expressing the inexpressible is music.” This profound statement from English writer, Aldous Huxley, demonstrates the importance that music obtains in today’s society. Simply, music is a form of expression, not limited to any specific genre. Although this expression is not limited to one genre, there is one that seemingly obtains the title of most controversial. The Rap/Hip-Hop genre has been harshly criticized for the topics of discussion in which many songs entail, and the various projected images. Everything has its pros and cons; many people have lost sight of its purpose. Student of Dartmouth College, Rebecca Heller states, "Many people don't realize that hip-hop began by bringing communities and neighborhoods together on the streets of the South Bronx." Hip-Hop is not only a tool of personal expression, but it is also a tool of communal empowerment. Tricia Rose, author of Black Noise, writes that “it is a black cultural expression that prioritizes black voices from the margins of urban America” (2). Hip-Hop is a social movement. It is a way for the African-American community to identify, as the search for identification is a struggle. “Hip hop emerges from a complex cultural exchanges and larger social and political conditions of disillusionment and alienation” (59). In today’s society, the best method in connecting to the youth is the media outlet, through...
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...important, but not well recognized, American Author because he the main inventor of Afro-American fiction. Chesnutt was an African-American lawyer and author in the 19th century. He mostly wrote short stories that were collected in in his two most famous books, The Conjure Woman and The Wife of His Youth and Other Stories of the Color-Line. The Conjure Woman is a collection of Stories where slaves mainly escape to the north by using the powers of voodoo. The Wife of His Youth and Other Stories of the Color-Line is a collection of stories that explored slave behavior and culture. Chesnutt and his works are important because Chesnutt was the first recognized black American author, he used slave diction and culture, and he wrote about social problems from the different races. Chesnutt was the first recognized African-American author. His short story “The Gophered Grapevine” was...
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...PYC4811 ASSIGNMENT 2 TABLE OF CONTENT CONTENTS PAGE 1 INTRODUCTION 2 2 APPLICATION OF THE PRINCIPLES OF COMMUNITY PSYCHOLOGY 2-4 2.1POVERTY 2 2.2PREVENTION 2 2.3CHANGE 2 2.4EMPOWERMENT 3 2.5INDIVIDUAL WELNESS 3 2.6CITIZEN PARTICIPATION 3 2.7COLLABORATION AND COMMUNITY STRENGHT 3 2.8SENSE OF COMMUNITY 4 3 CONCLUSION 4 REFERENCES ...
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...through individuals.’’ For many around the globe, the use of social networks has become part and parcel of life. Students or youths in particular have made browsing social networking sites a daily habit. The use of social networks has enabled networking around the world very simple and has made individuals do away with engaging themselves in sporting activities as many prefer to chat online. This essay outlines some of the positive impacts and drawbacks of social networking. Firstly social networking sites encourage individuals not to limit their social life by seeking friends around the world through networking. People who have never met are able to share experiences and common interests. In addition, lifetime friendships can be built through social networking. According to a Science Daily article (http://www.sciencedaily.com/2011, p.1) students state that social networking helps them to further improve and maintain friendships, make new friends, stay in touch with family et cetra. This shows that overall social networking sites can be very influential when it comes to friendship. Secondly, every student is unique in their own way; some are able to express themselves openly while others are shy in nature. Social networking facilitates open communication, leading to enhanced information discovery and delivery. In addition, it does not require one to voice out their opinions and ideas. Individuals are able to choose the preferred option and that is to communicate through social...
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...Anthem Essay In her essay “How to live a Rational Life in an Irrational Society” Ayn Rand states that in a society with zero judging there could only be two people who had initiative. They could be someone who was willing to create rational and moral judgements for society or a thug who had no moral responsibilities such as a thug who was aware of how irrational the society really is. The character from her novel Anthem Equality 7-2125 would certainly agree with her as he is a person in the former group. He was right to denounce the way of his leaders in moral terms and to leave the City. On Ayn Rand’s Essay In her essay “How to live a Rational Life in an Irrational Society” Ayn Rand states that the only way to keep society rational is to judge others and be prepared to be judged yourself. In her essay Ayn Rand states, “An irrational society is a society of moral cowards—of men paralyzed by the loss of moral standards, principles and goals. But since men have to act, so long as they live, such a society is ready to be taken over by anyone willing to set its direction. The initiative can come from only two types of men: either from the man who is willing to assume the responsibility of asserting rational values—or from the thug who is not troubled by questions of responsibility.”. This is because not judging only benefits the evil overall and not the...
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...Personal Essay This paper will be focusing on the life experiences that guided me towards selecting my current career choice of becoming a registered nurse; most of which has been through inspiration. Throughout the body of this essay highlights will be made on personal encounters with other healthcare professionals, past work history that contributed to my current career choice and individuals that were the driven force behind me wanting to be a nurse. I chose nursing because this profession allows me to care for an individual in their most vulnerable state and to gain trust and rapport over time. As a nurse, I will contribute by helping people live longer, richer lives. This decision was made at the age of fifteen in 2004 after becoming a member of the Antigua and Barduda Red Cross Society; which was the first exposure I had to the healthcare sector and where the true meaning of helping a complete stranger was understood. During my tenure I became a Certified Peer Counsellor to teenagers, where I learnt the skill of using effective therapeutic communication to converse with abused teens; be it physically, emotionally or sexually. Being certified gave me the opportunity to educate young adults on current pressing topics such AIDS, HIV and STD prevention. Additional, duties as a peer counsellor included distributing condoms and performing the necessary demonstration to ensure safe and effective usages. As one of the younger active members of The Antigua and Barbuda Red...
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...Reclaiming Cultural and Social Diversity: Mobilizing Youth for National Harmony and Peace: the Search for Resources Within Students Essays 0 Reclaiming Cultural and Social Diversity: Mobilizing Youth for National Harmony and Peace: the Search for Resources Within Contents Acknowledgements ............................................................................................................. 2 Introduction ......................................................................................................................... 3 ESSAYS ....................................................................................................................... 5 1. Social & Cultural Diversity............................................................................................... 6 2. Citizenship ...................................................................................................................... 7 3. What Is A Good Pakistani Citizen? Define His/Her Responsibilities & Rights. ............... 8 4. What Is A Good Pakistani Citizen? Define His / Her Rights And Responsibilities .......... 9 5. What Is A Good Pakistani Citizen? Define His / Her Rights And Responsibilities ........ 11 6. Sectarian Violence: Implications for Citizens and Country............................................ 12 7. Becoming A Responsible Citizen: Can Education Help? .............................................. 13 8. Becoming A Responsible Citizen: Can Education Help...
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...Renaissance was the time period that immediately followed the First World War. During the great migration a vast number of African Americans left the southern states to relocate to northern states such as Chicago, New York, and Washington DC. They were in search of new employment and artistic opportunities. This was the beginning of the Harlem Renaissance era where African American artist (musicians and poets) called themselves the “New Negro”. The two Poets I chose to discuss throughout this essay are Langston Hughes and Claude McKay. I will be discussing their roles during the Harlem Renaissance, The elements of double consciousness within their poetry, and the primary themes seen in poetry during this time period. Langston Hughes Langston Hughes was one of the most influential writers during the Harlem Renaissance. His unique style of writing incorporated Jazz and Blues music into poetry. Langston Hughes played a significant role during the Harlem Renaissance period, his work became the voice for the average African American struggling to deal with the stress / pressures of being racially discriminated against. His poems encouraged them to love their brown skin and accept who they are and not how they are seen by their white counterparts. Instead of African Americans sacrificing their identity (culture) to blend into the white society he encouraged Negroes to have a sense of pride in their ancestry and celebrate their spirituality and culture. His poems spoke against racism and...
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...offender) are to be treated fairly and consistently. Murphy and Barkworth (2014) have portrayed procedural justice by the following main ideas; Respect, Trustworthiness and Voice, with other researchers such as Miller and...
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...Working Models (10m) (a) Authoritative Parenting-2m Parents put maturity demands on youth. Parent use their authority to keep children safe and guide children’s choice. At the same time, also listen to children’s point of view to encourage their input on activity choices within specific bounds. (b) Instrumental Scaffolding-2m Adult give suggestions and cues to youth without teaching directly. When youth worked with an adult, adult often made comments that prompted youth to think about longer-term of the problem. (c) Motivational Scaffolding-2m Adults scaffold youths’ motivation by communicating confidence which lead to a desired ends. Adults can help youth sustain engagement in learning by setting achievable goals. (d) Supporting cycles of Real-World Learning-2m Adult plays a role to support youths’ learning cycle. In adventure program, they may supply provisions for a trip into the wilderness and accompany the youth to ensure their safety. (e) Asset Building-2m Development occurs within the full set of environments, relationships, and interactions that make up a youth’s daily life. Adult can intervene by altering the obstacle course of youths’ daily life. Part B (20m) 1. Socialisation (a) What is Youth Transnational framework?-2m - Transition is the process or a period of changing from one state or condition to another. A= Childhood dependence (1 to 17 years old) B= Youth independence and awareness to interdependence (18 to 24 years old) C= ‘Uber’s dependence...
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