College of Business, Hospitality and Tourism Studies
School of Accounting

Com 501 Communication Literacy
Trimester 3, 2015
Assignment 2- Critical Review

Name: Devika Chand
Id: 2015131951
Tutorial Group: 2

BIBLOGRAPHY DETAILS
Review: Vijayakumar, L., 2004. Suicide prevention: the urgent need in developing countries. World Psychiatry, 3(3), pp. 158-159.

Suicide prevention: the urgent need in developing countries
Any death caused by disease or old age is natural and may not be accounted for any thriller to anyone (Palmer, 2009). It may be plaguing to know death which might had occurred due to unusual ways as these deaths could be stopped. There are no doubt of unnatural death over the world as social media usually highlights these in their broadcast over the air, television and even social networking sites such as Facebook. One of many unnatural death is suicide which may be a rising issue in developing countries as highlighted by Lakshmi Vijayakumar in her journal article Suicide prevention: the urgent need in developing countries.
In her article, majority of the suicide occur in developing countries and major target countries are India and Chaina. Furthermore, when comparing the age group people who commit sucide in developed counties are between 15 to 25 year or elderly but developing countries the target group are married women and people below age of 30 years. Lakshmi Vijayakumar’s article also reveals method used for sucide in developing countries which are pesticides poisioning, hanging and self-immolation but as for developed countries their practise is expensive such as firearms, car exhuast and poisoning. The reason for suicide in developed countries are commonly due to loneliness, rejection and maritial conflicts on the other hand inter-generational conflicts, love failure and exam failure which increse the level of stress which finally leads to suicide. Domestics voilence is also a contributing factor for suicide as mentioned in the article for developing countries. Lakshmi Vijayakumar closes her article with series of solution which might reduce the challenging issue faced by developing counties. She urges that help from non-government organization, native healers and practitioners of alternative medicine could be utilized as a solution but most importantly special programs should be designed for women and young, keeping in mind cost relevance, social background and culturally appropriate.
The author has used simple sentences with basic parts of speech for her writing which strengthen her article since majority of readers will understand. Lakshmi Vijayakumar’s article was published in the year 2004 and her reference for her article is significant enough as all the reference are between years 1999 to 2002 which is close to year 2004. She also uses persuasive data to prove that developing countries face issues of suicides in the early stage of her writing such as: “More than half the suicides (54%) in the world occur in China and India”, she explains (p 158). Finally, her claim could be proven true since Mitra (2006) also highlighted that in India violence against women is contributing factor for suicide.
Even though her article contains a lot of quantitative data but her article has a falls. She introduces her writing stating “Seventy-three percent of suicides in the world occur in developing countries, though data is unavailable for 73% of countries” (p 158), this implies that she herself is not sure about the data and also she did not provide any reference for the readers to validate her claim. To add on, her first sentence: “Data on suicide is not available for roughly half the countries (53%) of the world and one third (27%) of the population” (p 158), is not precise since she claims that one third is 27% but this is mathematically incorrect. One third is 33.33% not 27% as stated by the author. Moreover, when the article was published in the year 2004 then it had incorrect reference in the commentary which later corrected in the year 2005 (Psychiatry, 2005). Lastly, despite the writer gave solution for the problem of suicide but she fails to give any evidence of its success or its practice over the world.
To conclude, the article was interesting as I read which also provided some facts. However, despite these there are grounds on which it could have been improved on such as providing current data and reference.

Bibliography
Palmer, B., 2009. What, Exactly, Are "Natural Causes"?. [Online]
Available at: http://www.slate.com/articles/news_and_politics/explainer/2009/12/what_exactly_are_natural_causes.html
[Accessed 13 October 2015].
Psychiatry, W., 2005. Erratum. [Online]
Available at: http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1414755/
[Accessed 13 October 2015].
Siddhartha Mitra and Sangeeta Shroff, 2006. Determinants of Suicide rates in Developing Countries – An Econometric Investigation of the Indian Case, Pune: Social Science Electronic Publishing, Inc..

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SCHOOL OF COMMUNICATION, LITERATURE AND LANGUAGE DEPARTMENT OF COMMUNICATION
ASSIGNMENT 2 CRITICAL REVIEW MARKING CRITERIA 20 %

Criteria | Max Mark | AwardedMark | Comments | STRUCTURE- 10 Marks * BIBLIOGRAPHIC DETAILS- * INTRODUCTION--Purpose of article clearly stated -Overall evaluation/thesis stated. -Background details can be Included. * BODY-Brief Summary-1 -Evidence/research-1 -Critical Evaluation-1 * CONCLUSION – Overall evaluation clearly re-stated -States how article could have been improved or how article can be used and by whom. | 1333 | | | CONTENT-10 MarksBRIEF SUMMARY All Key ideas highlighted, a synopsis of the article, clear and structured in line with author’s argument.RESEARCH/EVIDENCEThis section states the evidence the author has presented in the article. What these arguments mean, any counter arguments and the relevance of all these to the body of knowledge existing in society at present. CRITICAL EVALUATION –The main section in the review. This involves critical thinking, questioning the basis of the author’s arguments. The writer must present his/her evaluation of the article. An in-depth analysis of the article, both positive and negative elements can be drawn upon.A comparison of other ideologies or conflicting views points, bias or lack of credible evidence to substantiate the author’s argument. Students should be able to critique the article after giving the key ideas and the author’s arguments in their paper.ORIGINALITY Communicates own perspective, position, creative element. No plagiarism evident. | 2341 | | | GRAMMAR , VOCABULARY, PARAGRAPHING AND STYLE -10 MarksGRAMMAR- 4 marks – Excellent: generally correct in expression, clear, precise. Tense, agreement, spelling, punctuation, prepositions, articles, conjunctions, pronouns and other parts of speech are correctly used. 2-3 marks – Very good: a few minor lapses, but still in command of grammar. No spelling and punctuation errors.1 mark – Unsatisfactory. Many errors are hindering understanding. VOCABULARY/STYLE -2 marks-wide variety, relevant ,original ,Academic, Formal language, tone 1 mark- simple, average effort. Minus ½ mark if informal expressions used. This depends on the frequency of error.SENTENCE STRUCTURE-PARAGRAPHING/UNITY - | 42 2 2 | | | | 30 /15% | | | REFERENCING -10 MarksBIBLIOGRAPHY Alphabetical arrangement (1 mark), correct style (2 marks) & all details (2 marks) Award 5 marks for bibliography (alphabetical arrangement, correct style, all details included).IN-TEXT REFERENCE (Appropriate quotation, correct style). (To have 5 marks at least 3 in-text references are needed, correct stylistic details, relevance/appropriateness) For in-text references-(appropriate quotation, correct style, all correct details). Minus marks if details are missingMinus 1 mark for errors in style or not appropriate. | 55 | | | | 10/ 5 % | | | TOTAL | 40 /20% | | |