Revision of Critical essay

*Introduction

In today's society there is a lot of pressure on students academically to have a good performance and

with that comes a lot of stress. Some students find a way to try to balance their hectic school life style

whether it be some kind of recreational activity. One of those activities is sports and whether it can

make a better student. I believe that yes it can increase your performance academically because it

teaches you skills such as focus, fitness and communication with others.

In the article “do athletes make better students, Natalie Gil written for the guardian.com. Natlie

Gil claims that studies show that doing both can benefit studies and sports performance, providing

motivation and preparation. Natalie Gil also goes on to state that it helps organization and pervents

procrastination and that being fit alters students mood in a good way claiming a healthy body is a

healthy mind. Lastly, Natalie Gil goes on to show evidence that it also helps with communication and

team work whether at school or later in landing a career.

Pathos

Natalie Gil Appeals to the stress and desire to succeed in today's world as students upcoming in today's

society. She also uses the points or appeal to support her view or stance on the subject that athletes do

make better students and that this will lead to success not only in their academic life but also in their

career choice

Logos Natalie Gil writes deductively with her thesis at the beginning she also supports her view with studies

and claims from other professors, and assumes that all athletes make excellent students, This appeals to

the readers logical ability basically showing that here a study shown from ex: professor claims that by

keeping a healthy body supports a healthy mind.

Ethos

Natalie Gil writes about the subject unbiased about both sides and uses simple and complex sentences

to convey her points since shes writing for the guardian. Natalie Gil also uses loaded language to

engage the readers attention to keep the reader intrigued an involved in the article

Response

Natalie Gil's stance on the subject has very valid points being that an athlete dose help one become a

better student and that it is possible to balance the workload. Natalie Gil first shows evidence of this by

a research published but the International Journal of the history of sport that having “duel careers” g

gives one the skills needed such as motivation, preparation and revealing stress. Natalie Gil then goes

on to provide reference to Quentin Sluper who is head of sport, music and drama describing that

students are often asked to exercise because of its health properties and saying that a healthy body is

beneficial to keeping a healthy mind. Quentin also states that ninety percent of students take part in

sports, and the counseling director stats that the students are mentality healthy because of their physical

activity. Lastly Natalie Gil provides a research study done by the British University of sports increases

students employment prospects. Employers look for specific abilities to balance academic and other

engagements, like training and participation in sports. This leads to team work and communication at

work and helps efficiency with work flow.

* Conclusion

In general I think its safe to say that keeping in shape and doing some activity whether is be a sport

or just fitness in general can not only make your academic performance better, but just your overall life

better by increasing your confidence and your mental health. So I would have to agree with the claims

and statements that Natalie Gil has provided and say just keep fit and have a healthy life