In the proposal titled, “Vancouver Island Eco Initiatives – Request for Proposals VIEI-11-02,” by Kristin Kidd, the writer describes the idea that given the current environmental status of the world, it would be immensely beneficial to introduce a course that teaches students how to be environmentally conscious. By incorporating details of current environmental ill practices, the writer describes how climate change, depletion of natural resources and increased waste production justify the need for this new course. The writer goes on to explain how the program will run and how much it will cost. However, with better formatting, more accessible language and a more realistic explanation of the drawbacks, the proposal will better encompass the …show more content…
Large blocks of scientific evidence is hard to follow and understand, especially if the reader is someone who is not fully educated on the topic that is being presented. Therefore, although evidence is provided, the proposed idea is not justified in a way that can ensure all readers will understand the reasoning. Second, the lack of proper formatting makes it difficult to fully grasp the scheduling implementation and the benefits of the course. The writer tends to write in a way that creates large blocks of text and few diagrams or figures. For example, the paragraph labeled, “schedule,” is one mass of text that is hard to follow. This does not allow the reader to formulate an opinion that understands the scheduling possibilities. This makes it hard for them to accept the proposal as an idea which could be beneficial to schools in the area. This lack of proper formatting also affects the part of the proposal that seeks to explain the benefits of the project. Throughout the proposal the writer hardly touches on the benefits of the course. Any benefits that come from the proposal are hidden in other paragraphs as brief