...E-structor Response Form (Your marked-up essay is below this form.) HOW THIS WORKS: Your e-structor has written overview comments about your essay in the form below. Your e-structor has also embedded comments [in bold and in brackets] throughout your essay. Thank you for choosing Smarthinking's OWL; best wishes with revising your paper! Hello there, Ramesh! My name is Erin I., and I will be helping you with your persuasive essay on today video games. Let's begin! *Strengths of the essay: First of all, I would like to commend you on this part of your first paragraph: The most generally utilized "positive" effect feature diversions are said to have on youngsters is that they may enhance a player's manual mastery and PC education. Continually enhancing innovation likewise gives players better illustrations that give a more "sensible" virtual playing knowledge. Providing background details about the impact of video games to children familiarizes your readers with your subject. This can prepare them for the discussions you will have in the rest of your paper, which helps them have a better understanding of your draft. This also makes your essay informative and detailed. Nice work! :) Main Idea/Thesis: Please clarify the kind of essay you are trying to write so that the next tutor can guide you more effectively. Right now, based on your draft, it seems that you are trying to write a persuasive essay on video games, so this is what I will work with. Now, I noticed that your...
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...THE EDUCATOR AS ASSESSOR EDAHOD5 ASSIGNMENT 2 BY STUDENT NUMBER: 33686735 TABLE OF CONTENT QUESTION 1 1. ASSESSMENT TASK 1.1 ASSESSMENT CHECKLIST 1.2 ASSESSMENT GRID 1.3 ASSESSMENT RUBRIC QUESTION 2 2.1 ASSESSMENT PLANNING 2.2 ASSESSMENT ACTIVITIES 2.2.1 ASSESSMENT ACTIVITY FOR LESSON TOPIC: CARTOON 2.2.2 ASSESSMENT ACTIVITY FOR LESSON TOPIC: PERSUASIVE ESSAY 2.2.3 ASSESSMENT ACTIVITY FOR LESSON TOPIC: MOVIE POSTER BIBLIOGRAPHY QUESTION 1 1. ASSESSMENT TASK Design a personal planner that covers the week from Monday to Sunday. Clearly mark the times starting from 6am to 10pm. Use a table format for your planner. Give your planner an appropriate title. Fill in a minimum of four activities that occupy your day. Colour code your priorities clearly and indicate what each colour means e.g. Red = important. 1.1 ASSESSMENT CHECKLIST Checklist for personal planner | Yes/no | 1. Title provided | | 2. Correct format used | | 3. Days clearly indicated | | 4. Times correctly indicated | | 5. Activities filled in on planner | | 6. Priorities clearly shown | | 7. Planner colour coded | | 8. Meaning of colour indicated | | Minimum standard: 8 | 1.2 ASSESSMENT GRID Learner’s name: Grade: Assessor: Date: Criteria | Maximum | Student’s mark | 1. Title provided | 1 | | 2. Correct format used | 2 | | 3. Days clearly indicated | 7 | | 4. Times correctly indicated | 3 | | 5. Activities filled in on planner | 4 | ...
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...Violent Video Games Should not be Banned By Chris Taylor Com/156 Effective Persuasive Essay August 1, 2010 Violent Video Games should not be Banned Violent video games that promote violence and criminal activity should not be banned because each game is properly labeled. It is the parent’s responsibility to monitor their children on what games they play and for how long they play the games. Numerous surveys have been taken that show games can enhance certain learning abilities and not cause violence. Violent video games are meant for adults and banning these games takes away the right of freedom of expression from the adult. The Entertainment Software Rating Board (ESRB) provides concise and impartial information about the content in computer and video games so parents can make a clear informed purchase. (www.esrb.org/ratings) ESRB provides ratings for each game that is distributed. These ratings have two equal parts: Rating symbols and content descriptors. Rating symbols on the front of the package provide age limits on who should be allowed to play the game. Age appropriateness is clearly marked and those younger than that should be monitored. The rating system used is the same system that TV shows and movies use to rate their content. Content descriptors which are located on the back of the package indicate elements in a game. These descriptors are C (early childhood), E (for everyone), E 10+ (everyone 10+), T (for teens), M (mature 17+), A (adults only)...
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...live. *Students will discover and evaluate different methods of escape from these prisons. *Students will practice writing in the persuasive mode, using evidence from the text and from their own lives to construct effective arguments proposing the best way to escape the troubles of life*Students will peer edit and revise for content, for sentence structure, and for use of figurative language. *Language Objective(s): *Students will continue to build vocabulary resources for discussing emotions. *Students will identify fragmentary sentence structure, voice, and effective use of figurative language in Cisneros’ style and use knowledge of style to develop originality in their own writing style. *Student will be able to participate in and contribute to collaborative learning, such as “think, pair, share” and “expert groups.” Key Vocabulary: prison, escape, safe haven, voice, style, figurative language, persuasive mode, context, concept map, anticipatory set, peer editing, rubric, tapping prior knowledge, description, sensory detail, quotation, five senses, , sentence fragments, “unacceptable in academic writing,” punctuation, prejudice, graphic organizer, Venn diagram, fluent, non-fluent, cycle of abuse, helpline, counselor, “think-pair-share,” editing, revising, support for assumptions, inadequate, off-topic, content, assessment, expert groups, game format *Supplementary Materials: The House on Mango Street, paperback copy for each student *SIOP Features *1. Content Objectives...
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...Sample MBA Essay - Stanford Graduate School of Business - Ben | MBA ... Page 1 of 3 « Back to Sample Essays for Top Business Schools Print Ben Below is one of Ben's essays for his Stanford application. We present the essay in its original form, with just cosmetic changes made to protect the author's identity. We then provide comments and suggestions, based on the advice available in Your MBA Game Plan. The question that he answers in this essay is: What are your short-term and long-term career aspirations? How will an MBA education further your development? Why does the academic experience offered at the Stanford GSB appeal to you? (Unlimited length) I work at the Information Technology industry since 1993, when I was recruited to the classified electronic surveillance unit of Israel Defense Force (IDF). Since I've advanced to management positions in a very early stage of my professional career (at the age of 19 I've already finished the IDF Technical Officers course and was positioned as a Team Leader commanding 8-10 network professionals and computer technicians), it was a natural step to continue my career on management positions in the industry after my release from the active duty at 1997. I started my civilian career as an Information Systems Manager at Mobile Solutions Ltd., a dynamic Ireland-based start-up company developing various hardware devices for mobile satellite antenna’s technology. During my military service I've come to realization that in order to...
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...April Beckham Comm./ 215 May 12, 2014 Dr. Marie Orizondo-Harding Persuasive Essay With racism still in existing in this day and time it’s hurting the members of our society. So many times we tend to look over all the derogatory statements and gestures of racism not realizing that’s hurting us more each and every day. Discrimination based on a person’s race or ethnicity is morally wrong. This paper will argue the fact if racism still exist in this day and time. There are many different reasons that living in society that we could all point reasoning’s as to why racism is wrong. At many universities and colleges across this nation there is an annual commemoration of Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr., and his vision of “a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character.” In one eloquent phrase, Dr. King defined both the essence of racism and its cure. Judging someone by race or skin color is racism, and moving toward judging someone only by their demonstrated character is the cure for racism. Campbell, D. G. (2012). The cultivation of racism. Academic Questions, 25(3), 389-393. doi:http://dx.doi.org/10.1007/s12129-012-9310-y The controversy has been framed in terms of gender (women), sexual preference (gays), religion (Muslims), ethnicity (Hispanics), and class (blue-collar workers), among others. But it is perhaps more stark in the case of race. Racism against "Blacks" is frequently cited as a reason why society needs...
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...section Vi essay forms Many people use the term “essay” to mean any paper written for a class. In actuality, there are many different types of essays, each of which has a unique purpose, form, and style. We call these different types of essays “modes of discourse,” and they include expository, persuasive, and comparecontrast essays to name just a few. This section of the Guide has a dual purpose. First, various types of essays are described and suggestions are included about how to approach each particular type of writing. Second, the sample essays are good tools for you to see how these different essays look in their final form. These are not templates (no essay can be a carbon copy of another even in form), but they will give you a good idea of what a final piece of writing for each mode of discourse looks like. It would be advantageous to critically analyze the form and content of each sample against the instruction for how to write each type of essay. chapter 21 expository essays Jennifer propp An expository essay explains something using facts rather than opinions. The purpose of this type of essay is to inform an audience about a subject. It is not intended to persuade or present an argument of any kind. Writing this type of essay is a good way to learn about all the different perspectives on a topic. Many students use the expository essay to explore a variety of topics, and do so in a wide range of formats, including “process” and “definition”...
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...|Analysing an Essay Question | 1. Introduction Common criteria of undergraduate essay writing focus on the following requirements: students need to be analytical and critical in their response students need to structure their writing logically students need to be persuasive writers | students need to answer the question | This booklet looks at, how to analyse your essay question. Other Learning Centre booklets in this series deal with the other aspects: • Analytical Writing deals with the difference between analytical and descriptive writing • Planning and Structuring an Essay deals with logical structures • Developing and Supporting an Argument deals with persuasion Expectations of student assignments One of the difficulties experienced by students, particularly in first year, is understanding what standard is expected in essays at tertiary level. As well as this, each subject discipline has its own ways of doing things and its own conventions about essay structure and writing style. For instance, in some subjects it is acceptable to write very personally and put forward your own opinions and feelings on a topic and in others such a personal response would not be appropriate. You need to find out the expectations and conventions...
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...Devry University: Entrepreneurial Finance December 05, 2010 The Entrepreneurial Story of Steve Jobs The Start of Apple Anusree Banerjee Table of Contents Executive summary 3 Pre-foundation partnership 4 Initial bootstrapping 4 Angel investors 4 Initial public offering 5 Success mantra 6 Appendices 8 Venture Capitalists tell their story: Arthur Rock on Steve Jobs 8 Preliminary confidential offering memorandum 9 Bibliography 10 Executive summary This report highlights the start of the entrepreneurial journey of Steve Jobs – the founder of Apple. The Apple journey started off as a partnership. Steve Jobs and Steve Wozniak had been friends for some time, having met in 1971, when their mutual friend, Bill Fernandez, introduced 21-year-old Wozniak to 16-year-old Jobs. Jobs managed to interest Wozniak in assembling a machine and selling it. They bootstrapped for the first product – Apple I. Mike Markkula was the first angel investor who showed belief in the product and the team. Markkula had made his fortune as a marketing manager at Fairchild Semiconductor and Intel, retiring at age 32. In 1977, Steve Jobs met with Markkula and convinced him that personal computers were an exciting opportunity. Markkula invested $250,000 in Apple for a one-third stake in the company and served as president from 1981-83. With Mike’s guidance and funding Apple ceased to be a partnership and was incorporated on April 1, 1976. Apple investors had a traditional exit...
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...HOW TO WRITE GREAT ESSAYS HOW TO WRITE GREAT ESSAYS Lauren Starkey ® NEW YORK Copyright © 2004 LearningExpress All rights reserved under International and Pan-American Copyright Conventions. Published in the United States by Learning Express, LLC, New York. Library of Congress Cataloging-in-Publication Data: Starkey, Lauren B., 1962– How to write great essays / Lauren Starkey. —1st ed. p. cm. ISBN 1-57685-521-X 1. English language—Rhetoric—Problems, exercises, etc. 2. Essay—Authorship—Problems, exercises, etc. 3. Report writing—Problems, exercises, etc. I. Title. PE1471.S83 2004 808'.042—dc22 2004003384 Printed in the United States of America 9 8 7 6 5 4 3 2 1 First Edition ISBN 1-57685-521-X For more information or to place an order, contact LearningExpress at: 55 Broadway 8th Floor New York, NY 10006 Or visit us at: www.learnatest.com Contents Introduction 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 vii Organization 1 Clarity 11 Word Choice 21 Mechanics 39 Revising, Editing, and Proofreading 55 Untimed Essay Writing Strategies 67 Timed Essay Writing Strategies 85 Sample Essay Prompts and Essays 97 Resources 111 CONTENTS HOW TO WRITE GREAT ESSAYS v Introduction n your preparations for college, you may find yourself facing a handful of high-stakes essays. Your college application requires at least one, and the SAT requires another. Depending upon the high...
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...What is Emergent Literacy? Emergent Literacy is the reading and writing concept, behavior and dispositions that precede and develop into conventional reading and writing. Recently the term “reading readiness” has given way “emergent literacy” by which we mean the many skills children need for reading and writing. From the time they were born and continuing through the preschool years, each child picks up in his or her own way. Listening, speaking, reading and writing are all part of emergent literacy. Literacy really begins when an infant coos or babbles, then hears those sound repeated by a responsive and loving adults. These early conversation, which can make adults feel a little silly, and a gentle introduction to spoken language and will soon change into soon change into the sound and rhythms of language. Adults encourage these beginning steps in to language by singing, saying nursery rhymes, doing finger play and sharing picture books. Reading Readiness vs Emergent Literacy Reading readiness has been defined as a point at which a person is ready to learn to read and the time during which a person transition from begin a non-reader into a reader. Other terms for reading readiness include early literacy while emergent literacy is how young children interact with books when reading and writing, even though they could not read or write in the conventional sense. According to piaget theory of cognitive development the concept of reading readiness refers to the...
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...Analyzing and Interpreting Literature 2012 Examination Guide These materials are owned and copyrighted by the College Board. They may not be posted on the Internet or on any other public document sharing site. The materials in these files are intended for PERSONAL USE ONLY. Violations of this policy may be subject to legal action including, but not limited to, payment for each guide that is disseminated unlawfully and associated damages. V isit our website at w ww.collegeboard.org/clep f or the most up-to-date information. © 2011 The College Board. College Board, CLEP, College-Level Examination Program, SAT and the acorn logo are registered trademarks of the College Board. inspiring minds is a trademark owned by the College Board. All other products and services may be trademarks of their respective owners. Visit the College Board on the Web: www.collegeboard.org. Introduction This is the only official guide to the 33 College-Level Examination Program® (CLEP®) exams. CLEP exams are administered on computer test centers across the country. This Guide has been written mainly for adults who are making plans to enroll in college, but it contains information of interest to others as well. College-bound high school students, current college students, military personnel, professionals seeking certification and persons of all ages who have learned or wish to learn college-level material outside the college classroom will find the Guide helpful as they strive...
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...|Assessment type |Hand in date |Percentage of Marks |Assessment description | |Formative assessment |27 March 2015 |0% |Assignment Plan | |Summative assessment |11 May 2015 |10% |Group Presentation | |Summative assessment |25 May 2015 |30% |Individual Supporting Summary | | | | |750 words | |Summative assessment |12 June 2015 |60% |Essay 1,500 | [pic] | | |What’s the module all about? | |Module and Programme Learning Outcomes | |Assessments | |Handing in your work | |Texts | |At-a-glance module calendar | |Assessment Workshops | | | [pic] The main aim of this module...
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...[pic] JPPSS ELA COURSE GUIDE 2011-2012 ENGLISH I The JPPSS Instructional Sequence Guides are aligned with the LA Comprehensive Curriculum. JPPSS Implementation of Activities in the Classroom Incorporation of activities into lesson plans is critical to the successful implementation of the Louisiana Comprehensive Curriculum. The Comprehensive Curriculum indicates one way to align instruction with Louisiana standards, benchmarks, and grade-level expectations. The curriculum is aligned with state content standards, as defined by grade-level expectations (GLEs), and organized into coherent, time-bound units with sample activities and classroom assessments to guide teaching and learning. The units in the curriculum have been arranged so that the content to be assessed will be taught before the state testing dates. While teachers may substitute equivalent activities and assessments based on the instructional needs, learning styles, and interests of their students, the Comprehensive Curriculum should be a primary resource when planning instruction. Grade level expectations—not the textbook—should determine the content to be taught. Textbooks and other instructional materials should be used as resource in teaching the grade level expectations...
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...What Darwin Didn’t Know: Darwin's First Clues: By David Quammen, Photograph by Luciano Candisani, MInden Pictures Summary The journey of young Charles Darwin aboard His Majesty's Ship Beagle, during the years 1831-36, is one of the best known and most neatly mythologized episodes in the history of science. Darwin visited the Galápagos archipelago in the eastern Pacific Ocean, and there beheld giant tortoises and finches. The finches, many species of them, were distinguishable by differently shaped beaks, suggesting adaptations to particular diets. The tortoises, island by island, carried differently shaped shells. These clues from the Galápagos led to conclude that Earth's living diversity has arisen by an organic process of descent with modification or evolution, as it's now known, and that natural selection is the mechanism. His theory developed slowly, secretively, and his book, The Origin of Species, didn't appear until 1859. Many scientists, along with some Victorian clergymen, resisted its evidence and arguments for decades afterward. The reality of evolution became widely accepted during Darwin's lifetime, but his particular theory, with natural selection as prime cause, didn't triumph until about 1940, after it had been successfully integrated with genetics. Apart from those clarifications, the most interesting point missed by the simplified tale is this: Darwin's first real clue toward evolution came not in the Galápagos but three years before, on a blustery beach...
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